Magazine Review Draft Six

Following further discussion, I decided to give some elements on the page more space, as some areas were more cramped. I changed the font and colour of the text providing information on the film, as well as shortening the synopsis and editing the footer area again.

Second Rough Cut

In order to cut down my film, I removed extra shots that didn't need cutting to, such as the final scene in which the caretaker and Hannah remain in the wide shot at the beginning. I also cut shots that didn't move the narrative forward, such as the part in food tech in which Hannah grabs a chopping board and uses the knife, as her movement is gentle and doesn't build much tension. There are scenes that I cut out too, as I ran into an issue filming the broom cupboard scene with Hannah, because she wasn't able to shut it fully with the broom in the way. This meant it didn't cut to the next scene as effectively and so I got rid of it all together. The second cut of the film is now just over six and a half minutes, and so some last refinements are still necessary to make it shorter. 

First Rough Cut

Following my assembly edit, I have cut a few shots to decrease the length of the overall film. I also shot the final scene and a pickup to replace the wide shot in which there were two people standing either side of the entrance. I have used the same shot size, but now there is no one standing outside to emphasise that there is no one to collect the girl. However, this edit stands at 10 minutes long, and so I will have to cut shots and sections of scenes to get it closer to the 5 minutes mark.

Magazine Review Draft Five

I have changed this draft from the previous by playing with the footer area of the page, and experimenting with a different font, and adding a the month and year, as well as removing the bottom page boundary. I have also made some subtle changes to the review itself to improve on the overall reading of the text. To make the image stand out more, I increased the saturation and cropped it so that it was in line with the text.

Poster Draft Two

Having discussed my first draft of my poster with my teacher and revisiting the most effective sketch of my ideas as agreed upon by my peers, I decided to try and create a new draft of my poster that includes more features that were similar to the idea. In this draft I used a background that excluded most of the books and folders in the background and used an effect to make it look more artistic, to merge with the mise en scene of a school location. The advantages of making it portrait again, was that I was able to fit the conventions of the poster at the bottom, allowing the title to stand out more than the previous draft. I altered the background afterwards, making it darker, so that I could have a draft in which the font was black and white.

Magazine Review Draft Four

Having received feedback from my teacher, we reached the agreement that the synopsis should be shortened and that further examples of technical codes within the film should be mentioned. I have edited the review to accommodate this. I have also added an image, and made slight changes to the colouring on the credits section at the bottom. Furthermore, I also changed the page number area of the page, to make it look as if it is more integrated into the rest of the page.

Assembly Edit

The following video is the first cut of my short film, minus scenes 14, 17 and 18. It currently stands at over 9 minutes, so my next steps are to refine by cutting shots that I don't need, and trimming down scenes that are too long in accordance with my script.